Hello ! Hope you are well ! The idea of the story is nice with quite a few links that we can find in our own world. I think using fantasy to discuss these topics is a wonderful idea. I don’t know what kind of feedback to give since it’s still in progress, so maybe what I’m saying are things already planned! For the intro, I would have added a few visuals, even simple ones, to present the universe, the Shepherd’s fortress, for example, a map of the empire, etc. The music is well-chosen to present the concept, I think. The idea of the flowchart is good, I hope you’ll keep it for the rest of the game. For the raven character, I would have added some onomatopoeia to characterize him more. Good luck with the rest of the development!
Thanks a lot for the encouragement! It's all definitely a work in progress still, which, yes, also includes images for the opening bit. Adding onomatopoeias for the raven is a good suggestion too, one I haven't thought of before (and I learned a new word too)
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Hello ! Hope you are well ! The idea of the story is nice with quite a few links that we can find in our own world. I think using fantasy to discuss these topics is a wonderful idea.
I don’t know what kind of feedback to give since it’s still in progress, so maybe what I’m saying are things already planned!
For the intro, I would have added a few visuals, even simple ones, to present the universe, the Shepherd’s fortress, for example, a map of the empire, etc.
The music is well-chosen to present the concept, I think.
The idea of the flowchart is good, I hope you’ll keep it for the rest of the game.
For the raven character, I would have added some onomatopoeia to characterize him more.
Good luck with the rest of the development!
Thanks a lot for the encouragement! It's all definitely a work in progress still, which, yes, also includes images for the opening bit. Adding onomatopoeias for the raven is a good suggestion too, one I haven't thought of before (and I learned a new word too)